Ek Thriller + Suspense based movie ka pure ka pure concept + casting + kahani + script + script
1. Title
BARF KE NEECHE
(English working title: Beneath the Ice)
2. Concept / Idea (Logline)
A PTSD-ridden ex-cop aur ek fearless journalist ek remote Himalayan town me ek 7 saal purane frozen murder mystery ke peeche ki sachchai dhoondte hain. Ek glacier se mili laash ke memory card me paanch tasveer hoti hain — aur har tasveer ek nayi maut ki taraf le jaati hai.
3. Story Outline
- · Glacier pighalti hai → ek laash aur memory card milta hai.
- · Har photo ek naye crime scene ka clue deta hai.
- · Kabir & Naina har jagah late pahunchte hain.
- · Inspector Dhamre ki involvement reveal hoti hai.
- · Dr. Rukhsar psychological layers decode karti hai.
- · Mastermind Sahir — jiska personal vendetta hai Kabir ke khilaaf.
- · Final face-off observatory me “time” aur “delay” ke theme ke saath.
- · Ending twist: ek aur memory card, jisme Kabir khud hai.
4. Characters (Bio Cards)
Kabir Singh Rathod (34) : Ex-cop, haunted by PTSD. Guilty of being “late” in past encounters. Silent, brooding, but sharp instincts.
Naina Sharma (30) : Fearless journalist. Empathetic anchor figure for Kabir. Believes in truth over safety.
Inspector Prakash Dhamre (45) : Local cop. Grey shade. Knew the truth about the encounter but stayed silent. Torn between duty and guilt.
Dr. Rukhsar Ali (38) : Psychologist. Calm, intellectual. Decodes Sahir’s psychological warfare. Acts as audience’s interpreter.
Sahir Khan (33) : Mastermind antagonist. Zeenat’s brother. Soft-spoken, cold, strategic. Believes in poetic justice through “delay.”
5. Plot Structure (3 Acts)
Act 1 – Melt (~40 min)
· Glacier murder revealed.
· First 3 photo deaths.
· Kabir reluctantly joins Naina.
· Dhamre’s guilt hinted.
Act 2 – Fog (~45 min)
· Investigations: drone, Zeenat’s truth, Z-13 code.
· Sahir toys with Kabir psychologically.
· Dhamre exposed in private.
· Town square disruption.
Act 3 – Avalanche (~35 min)
· Observatory showdown.
· Public confession + bomb trap.
· Kabir finally “on time.”
· Sahir injured but alive.
· Last card shows Kabir’s own face.
6. Script (Screenplay Format Sample)
INT. FORENSICS LAB – NIGHT
Low light. Technician clicks PHOTO #1. Screen flashes: ABANDONED CHURCH.
Kabir watches silently.
Naina (whisper): “Church… ya phir agla janaza?”
7. Scene Breakdown
Already detailed (86 scenes). Can be compiled into full 120-page screenplay.
8. Dialogues, Subtext & Themes
Themes:
· Delay vs Timing (“Tum late ho” vs “Main abhi hoon”).
· Justice vs Revenge.
· Truth buried under “barf.”
Sample Dialogue with Subtext:
Sahir: “Tum late ho, Kabir. Tum hamesha late rahoge.”
Kabir: “Nahi. Main abhi hoon.”
→ (Kabir accepting present, breaking PTSD cycle)
9. Treatment / Synopsis (2–3 pages pitch)
A remote Himalayan town becomes the stage for an ex-cop’s redemption and a brother’s revenge, when five photographs predict deaths with chilling accuracy. Barf Ke Neeche blends psychological warfare with investigative thriller, climaxing in an observatory showdown under a blood moon.
10. Storyboard / Shot Division (Visual Grammar)
- · Opening: Drone shots over glacier. Cold blues + silvers.
- · Church fire: Shaky handheld inside. Flames reflecting in Kabir’s eyes.
- · Ropeway death: Wide aerial → POV fall.
- · Observatory: Symmetry shots, ticking echoes. Red light of blood moon against icy blue.
11. Dialogue Drafts & Revisions
- · Keep dialogues short, tense, layered with guilt.
- · Revision pass: reduce exposition, add pauses (silence = subtext).
· Example:
o Naina: “Tum guilt se bhaag rahe ho.”
o Kabir: “Main bas waqt se bhaag raha hoon.”
12. Scene Pacing & Runtime
· Act 1: Slow burn, mystery setup.
· Act 2: Investigative pacing, revelations.
· Act 3: Fast, ticking clock editing.
· Average scene length: 1.5 min.
13. Character Arcs
- · Kabir: From broken/lost → regains control → closure.
- · Naina: From reporter → emotional anchor → co-hero.
- · Dhamre: From silence → confession → punishment.
- · Sahir: From avenger → orchestrator → broken but poetic end.
14. World-Building & Research
- · Realistic Himalayan town: bazaars, ropeway, lake, observatory.
- · Psychological trauma research: PTSD symptoms, delayed response guilt.
- · Drone / surveillance accuracy.
- · Snowstorm + observatory mechanics for climax realism.
15. Tone & Genre Consistency
- · Thriller/Suspense: always tense, no comic relief.
- · Cold, muted color palette; no flashy music.
- · Theme of “delay” woven in visual motifs (ticking, melting, slow drips).
16. Mini Checklist Before Writing
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Clear 3-act structure
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Visual + thematic motifs locked
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Characters with strong arcs
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Reusable dialogue motifs (“late / abhi”)
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Cinematic set-pieces mapped (Church, Ropeway, Lake, Cabin, Square, Observatory)
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Runtime balance (~120 min)
Barf Ke Neeche — Feature Screenplay (v1)
BARF KE NEECHÉ
Genre: Thriller • Suspense • Mystery-Drama
Draft: v1 — Feature-Length Screenplay (~120 pages formatted)
Language: Hindi (Roman) with occasional English
Written by: You + GPT-5 Thinking
Formatting note: Sluglines in ALL CAPS. Character names capped. Short action lines. Dialogues concise. Scene numbers for production later.
ACT 1 — MELT
1. EXT. HIMALAYAN GLACIER – DAWN
White silence. Wind howls. A drone glides over a melting glacier. Beneath the ice, a half-rotted SKELETON glints.
LOCAL POLICE dig. A CONSTABLE pries out a SMALL MEMORY CARD.
A faint whisper on the wind — almost imagined:
VOICE (V.O.)
Woh tumhe dekh rahe hain...
The Constable chills. Pockets the card.
Cut hard.
2. EXT. HILL-STATION BAZAAR ROAD – MORNING
Mist. Pine resin in air. Woollen stalls. Radio from a tea shack crackles about the glacier body.
KABIR SINGH RATHOD (34), ex-cop, quietly sips chai. His hand trembles, barely.
RADIO (V.O.)
Sath saal purana qatl... barf ke neeche daba...
Kabir closes eyes. A flash of siren. Gunshots. He drowns it with another sip.
3. INT. DHABA (TEA STALL) – CONTINUOUS
NAINA SHARMA (30) enters — rucksack, DSLR. She sits opposite.
NAINA
Yahan ki chai thandi jaldi hoti hai... ya log?
KABIR
Yahan sab kuch jaldi thanda ho jata hai.
Beat. They listen to radio.
NAINA
Glacier case cover karne aayi hoon.
KABIR
Akele?
NAINA
Sach ke saath hoon. Bheed ki zaroorat nahi.
A small smile almost appears on Kabir — then fades.
4. EXT. POLICE OUTPOST – LATE MORNING
Media crowd. Tape. INSPECTOR PRAKASH DHAMRE (45) gives a presser — polite smile, guarded eyes.
DHAMRE
Laash ki pehchaan baki hai. Ek memory card mila hai. Forensics ko bheja gaya
hai.
Naina notes. Kabir watches from the fringe.
5. INT. FORENSICS ROOM – NOON
Dim lab. A TECH plugs the CARD. The monitor pops: PHOTO #1 — ABANDONED STONE CHURCH at dusk.
TECH
Bas yehi?
DHAMRE (masking recognition)
Save kardo.
He leaves. The Tech squints at a tiny dark smudge near the bell.
6. EXT. PINE FOREST TRAIL – AFTERNOON
Kabir walks alone. PTSD flashes — muffled shouts, muzzle flare. He stops. Breathes. Counts: one-two-three. Moves.
7. INT. SMALL NEWSPAPER OFFICE – EVENING
Local paper office — maps, pins, sticky notes. Naina zooms into PHOTO #1.
NAINA (murmur)
Bell ke paas... yeh shadow? Marker?
She grabs a jacket.
8. EXT. ABANDONED CHURCH – SUNSET
Wind moans. The bell sways faintly. Kabir and Naina approach from two sides.
KABIR
Yahan case ka link ho sakta.
NAINA
Ya trap.
A faint petrochemical smell.
KABIR
Petrol.
NAINA
Kisi ne set kiya hai.
They exchange a look. Step inside.
9. INT. CHURCH – CONTINUOUS
Pews scattered. Melted wax. A corner has BURNT CLOTH SCRAPS.
WHOOMPH! A small incendiary ignites. Flames lick the walls.
Kabir grabs Naina, drags her out.
10. EXT. CHURCH – NIGHT
The church blazes. A LOCAL WATCHMAN (50s) stares, guilt-ridden.
KABIR (shouting)
Kisne lagayi aag?
The Watchman bolts into darkness.
Sirens approach. Naina shoots the inferno on DSLR. Kabir scans the tree-line — a fleeting SHADOW.
11. INT. POLICE OUTPOST – NIGHT
Dhamre and Constables watch a fuzzy CCTV STILL: a shadowy figure near the church fence.
CONSTABLE
Watchman ka phone band. Ghar par nahi.
DHAMRE (flat)
Usse milne wala kaun tha?
CONSTABLE
Sahir Khan.
Dhamre suppresses a reaction.
12. EXT. KABIR’S RENTED ROOM – LATE NIGHT
Bare, cold room. A rectangle on the wall where a photo-frame once hung.
A knock. Naina.
NAINA
Mujhe lagta hai card ke photos future jagah batate hain.
KABIR
Aur har jagah maut?
NAINA (beat)
Ek ho chuki.
They sit in the silence.
13. INT. TOWN CAFÉ – MORNING
Steam off coffee.
NAINA
Watchman?
KABIR
Gayab. Dhamre usse jaanta hai.
NAINA
Tum Dhamre par shak?
KABIR
Main sab par karta hoon.
14. INT. FORENSICS ROOM – SAME
Tech opens PHOTO #2: RUSTY ROPEWAY STATION — trolley frozen mid-air.
Dhamre’s jaw tightens imperceptibly.
15. EXT. ROPEWAY STATION – AFTERNOON
Wind howls over the chasm. Naina, Kabir arrive. A lone RUNNER waves from the platform edge.
Railing SNAPS. The Runner slips.
KABIR
Ruko!
He lunges, snatches the man’s cap — but the body plunges into the abyss.
Kabir stares into the gorge — empty.
KABIR (hard)
Hum late hain. Paach minute.
16. INT. POLICE OUTPOST – EVENING
Dhamre flips a CASE DIARY. A page: “SAHIR — SISTER’S ENCOUNTER — 2018.” He folds the page, locks it away.
17. EXT. PSYCHOLOGIST CLINIC – DUSK
Board: DR. RUKHSAR ALI.
Inside, calm plants, warm lighting.
RUKHSAR
Saans le kar bolo.
KABIR
Main bacha nahi paa raha.
RUKHSAR
Koi tumhe bachaane ki zimmedari de raha hai... aur tod bhi raha hai.
Kabir absorbs that.
18. INT. NEWSPAPER OFFICE – NIGHT
Naina builds a timeline. A sealed ENVELOPE slips under the door.
She opens: PHOTO #3 (PRINT) — LAKESIDE BOATHOUSE – 2 AM. A handwritten corner: Dekhte rehna.
Naina looks at the clock.
19. EXT. LAKESIDE – NIGHT (1:40 AM)
Mist. Thin ice on a black lake. Boathouse door ajar.
KABIR
Do baje kuch hoga.
NAINA
Hum chhupe rahenge.
Footsteps outside. A silhouette like the Watchman.
2:00 AM — a GUNSHOT. The silhouette FALLS. Ice CRACKS. Body slips into black water.
Kabir leaps, breaks the ice — FREEZING SHOCK — the body drifts away.
Naina’s lens catches a pair of gloves floating.
20. INT. POLICE OUTPOST – NIGHT
Dhamre’s phone BUZZES. Distorted voice:
VOICE
Photo chaar khol lo.
On his laptop: PHOTO #4 — CLIFF EDGE with PINE CROSS.
Dhamre exhales — rattled.
21. EXT. HILL-TOP SHRINE (PINE CROSS) – SUNRISE
Kabir, Naina examine a small METAL TAG: “Z-13.”
KABIR
Coordinate?
NAINA
Ya kisi ka number.
Three distinct footprints around the cross.
22. INT. DHAMRE’S HOUSE – MORNING
Simple. Medals on a wall. He unlocks the drawer: OLD CASE FILE — “ZEENAT KHAN — ENCOUNTER REPORT.” A young woman’s photo. Dhamre shuts his eyes — a tremor of guilt.
23. EXT. LOCAL MARKET – DAY
Naina talks to an AGED PHOTOGRAPHER.
PHOTOGRAPHER
Church wale photo ka angle... drone jaisa.
NAINA
Kiske paas hoga?
PHOTOGRAPHER
Ek aadmi. Cash. Naam nahi. Aankhon me khamoshi.
24. INT. ROPEWAY CONTROL ROOM – DAY
Kabir finds a CHALK SKETCH on a panel — a CIRCLE-CROSS and a penciled “Z-13.”
He takes a picture.
25. EXT. TOWN SQUARE – AFTERNOON
DR. RUKHSAR meets Naina.
RUKHSAR
Yeh visual triggers—ek conditioning pattern hai. Target: Kabir.
NAINA
Kyuki woh ex-cop hai?
RUKHSAR
Kyuki woh us raat wahan tha.
26. INT. SMALL BAR – DUSK
Kabir nurses water.
SAHIR (O.S., soft)
Tum ab bhi late ho.
Kabir turns. Nobody. The jukebox starts by itself.
27. EXT. CLIFF EDGE (PINE CROSS) – NIGHT
Gale-force wind. Dhamre waits. A shadow steps out — SAHIR KHAN (33). Calm, soft-spoken.
SAHIR
Aapne us raat dekha tha... phir bhi chup rahe.
DHAMRE
Main order par tha.
SAHIR
Is baar aap mere order par hain.
He hands a PENDRIVE.
SAHIR
Photo paanch release kijiye. Varna aapka sach pighal jayega.
28. INT. FORENSICS ROOM – NIGHT
Tech opens PHOTO #5: SNOWFIELD CABIN — TONIGHT 11:30 PM. In a corner, Kabir’s silhouette.
The Tech glances around. No one. Gooseflesh.
29. EXT. SNOWFIELD – NIGHT (11:10 PM)
Whiteout. A distant cabin glow.
NAINA
Mere saath raho.
KABIR
Yeh mera past hai.
NAINA
Aur mera present.
They press on.
30. INT. CABIN – CONTINUOUS
A single lamp. On the table: a SECOND MEMORY CARD and a note — PLAY.
Kabir inserts. VIDEO: ZEENAT (20s), crying. Sirens somewhere.
ZEENAT (ON VIDEO)
Bhai... mujhe bachao.
The feed cuts. A map blinks — Z-13.
KABIR (hollow)
...
A shadow slides past the frosted window.
31. EXT. CABIN OUTER – SAME
Naina follows fresh boot prints. A faint GUN COCK somewhere.
NAINA (whisper)
Kaun?
Nothing. Snow absorbs sound.
32. INT. CABIN – SAME
Kabir closes the laptop. A FILE lies on the table — appeared from nowhere.
He opens: ENCOUNTER TEAM: SI KABIR SINGH RATHOD. WITNESS: INSP. DHAMRE.
His face hardens to stone.
33. EXT. CABIN – LATE NIGHT
Sahir stands ten paces away, serene.
SAHIR
Tumne meri behen ko goli nahi chalayi. Par tum wahan the.
KABIR
Main ne rokne ki koshish ki.
SAHIR
Par tum late the.
SAHIR (soft smile)
Ab main tumhe har jagah late karaunga.
He fades into the storm.
34. INT. POLICE OUTPOST – SAME
Dhamre leaks PHOTO #5 to press.
HEADLINE FLASH
Ex-cop Kabir seen at crime cabin — new deaths linked?
Dhamre’s face empties. “Collateral.”
35. EXT. CABIN – PRE-DAWN
Kabir and Naina run — CABIN EXPLODES behind them. Pages of a logbook spiral, burn, and die in the snow.
Kabir punches the cold air once — rage without sound.
36. MONTAGE — ACT 1 CLOSE
• News scrolls: Glacier Murder Mystery Deepens
• Police tape at ropeway
• Divers at lake
• Dr. Rukhsar diagrams: TRIGGER → DELAY → FATAL EVENT → KABIR LATE
• Sahir watches the mountains from a window — small, satisfied smile.
CUT TO BLACK.
END OF ACT 1
ACT 2 — FOG
37. INT. NEWSPAPER OFFICE – MORNING
A fresh board. Naina pins photos #1–#5. A heading: WHO WRITES THE FUTURE?
NAINA
Killer humse future likhwa raha hai.
KABIR
Toh future chhin lo.
38. INT. DR. RUKHSAR’S CLINIC – DAY
KABIR
Neend nahi aati.
RUKHSAR
Narrative tumhare paas nahi. Usse chheen lo. Naam?
KABIR
Sahir.
RUKHSAR
Uska grief organized hai. Rehearsed.
39. EXT. OLD PHOTOGRAPHY SHOP – AFTERNOON
Ledger. Repeated initials: SK near drone rentals.
OWNER (anxious)
Cash. Clean. Aankhen khaali.
NAINA
Address?
He shakes head. Slides a receipt with a delivery pin.
40. INT. POLICE OUTPOST – SAME
CONSTABLE
Watchman ki laash mil gayi. Lake ke kinare.
DHAMRE
Case close on him.
CONSTABLE
Par gloves wale prints—
DHAMRE (cold)
Nature cleans.
41. EXT. CLIFF PATH – EVENING
Narrow trail. They reach a STONE CAIRN. Inside, an ENVELOPE: THIRD MEMORY CARD + note — CONFESS, OR REPEAT.
Kabir pockets the card.
42. INT. COMMUNITY HALL (PRESS MEET) – NIGHT
Local press buzz. Naina addresses.
NAINA
Killer route set karta hai. Police ko bhi.
DHAMRE (cutting)
Media panic mat failao.
NAINA
Ya sach chhupao?
Eyes turn. Silence. Dhamre exits.
43. INT. NAINA’S ROOM – LATE NIGHT
They play CARD-3. Grainy VIDEO: Pine Cross — Dhamre meets a masked man (Sahir’s build). No audio.
KABIR
Dhamre involved.
NAINA
Proof aadha.
KABIR
Kaafi shuruat ke liye.
44. EXT. POLICE BACK-ALLEY – NIGHT
Kabir confronts Dhamre.
KABIR
Tum witness the. 2018.
DHAMRE
Orders.
KABIR
Ab?
DHAMRE
Ab bhi orders.
KABIR
Kis ke?
DHAMRE
Jo tumse tez aata hai.
45. INT. DR. RUKHSAR’S CLINIC – MORNING
RUKHSAR (to Naina)
Sahir visual se Kabir ko regress kara raha. Tum anchor banogi.
NAINA
Main hoon.
46. EXT. BUS DEPOT – AFTERNOON
Sahir on a bench. Offers a candy to a child. Gentle eyes. In his bag: a DRONE CASE.
47. INT. LIBRARY – EVENING
Naina flips old clippings: ZEENAT — MISSING → ENCOUNTERED. A margin note: She never shot back.
NAINA (to self)
Fake encounter?
48. EXT. LAKE SHORE – SUNSET
Kabir skips a stone.
NAINA
Zeenat ne pehle fire nahi ki.
KABIR (cracks)
Maine dekha nahi... main late tha.
NAINA
Tum guilty ho. Murderer nahi. Farq samjho.
49. INT. FORENSICS – NIGHT
Tech studies CARD-3 frames. A reflection reveals SAHIR’S WRIST TATTOO — tiny circle-cross. A gloved hand slides around his neck — CHOKE.
The card is gone. The Tech collapses.
50. EXT. MARKET – NIGHT
Naina gets an ANONYMOUS TEXT: Actual Photo #4 MIDNIGHT — Pine Cross. Come alone.
She heads out. Kabir intercepts.
KABIR
Akeli nahi.
51. EXT. PINE CROSS – MIDNIGHT
Fog sea. A TAPE RECORDER sits under the cross.
Naina presses play — SAHIR’S VOICE:
SAHIR (V.O.)
Naina, tum anchor ho. Par anchor bhi kabhi-kabhi doobti hai.
In the distance, HEADLIGHTS flash — Dhamre’s car, then dark.
52. INT. DHAMRE’S CAR – SAME
Rear-seat: a blood-specked SCARF (Zeenat’s). Dhamre stares. Phone buzz.
SAHIR (V.O.)
Confess, Inspector. Warna main tumhe photo bana doon.
53. EXT. OLD COLD STORAGE RUINS – PRE-DAWN
Graffiti: Z-13. Inside a freezer bay — a LOCKER with Zeenat’s PHONE (dead) + PENDRIVE.
NAINA
Kisne safe rakha?
KABIR
Jo kabhi jaldi nahi karta.
54. INT. NEWSPAPER OFFICE – MORNING
The pendrive plays BODYCAM FOOTAGE: chaotic shouts; ZEENAT holds hands up; shots come off-frame; she falls.
Kabir breaks.
KABIR (hushed)
Meri goli nahi thi.
NAINA
Par tum wahan the.
KABIR
Late... rokne mein.
55. EXT. POLICE OUTPOST – DAY
Naina messages Dhamre a LINK.
TEXT (ON SCREEN)
Confess. Abhi.
56. INT. DHAMRE’S OFFICE – DAY
He places his BADGE on the table. Lifts his SERVICE PISTOL... then sets it down.
Dials.
DHAMRE
Sahir, main aa raha hoon.
57. EXT. MOUNTAIN PASS – DUSK
Sahir on the ridge. Kabir arrives.
SAHIR
Confession?
KABIR
Mere paas tumhara dard hai.
SAHIR
Mera dard organized hai. Tumhara bikhar chuka.
58. INT. DR. RUKHSAR’S CLINIC – EVENING
She hands Naina a small EAR-PIECE.
RUKHSAR
Jab Kabir breakdown kare, bolo — tum abhi ho. Anchor line banegi.
NAINA
Copy.
59. EXT. RIDGE – SUNSET
Dhamre arrives, hands raised.
SAHIR
Inspector, kahani sunao.
DHAMRE (hoarse)
Zeenat ne goli nahi chalayi. Order upar se tha. Maine roka nahi.
Kabir shuts his eyes.
SAHIR
Aur tum, Kabir?
KABIR
Main late tha.
SAHIR (gentle)
Main tumhe life bhar late karaunga.
A distant CRACK — like a sniper. It’s just ice.
SAHIR (to both)
Photo chhe: kal. Town Square.
He vanishes into fog.
60. INT. NEWSPAPER OFFICE – NIGHT
A new plan board: TOWN SQUARE — CROWD — TRAP?
KABIR
Stampede? Blast? Public confession?
NAINA
Hum narrative todte hain. Pehle bolte hain.
61. EXT. TOWN SQUARE – MORNING (D-DAY)
Crowd. Barricades. Volunteers. Police frisk. Naina goes LIVE.
NAINA (to camera)
Aaj hum killer ka pattern tod rahe hain.
Kabir scans rooftops. Spots a HOODED DRONE OPERATOR.
62. EXT. ROOFTOPS – CONTINUOUS
Kabir sprints. Jumps gaps. Tackles the operator — a 19-YEAR-OLD DECOY. Mask slips.
KABIR
Kahan hai asli?
DECOY (panicked)
Payment online. ID — “SK.” Delivery pin... Snowfield Observatory.
Kabir grabs the phone location.
63. EXT. SNOWFIELD OBSERVATORY – AFTERNOON
Glass dome under heavy cloud.
NAINA
Andhera baddi. Aaj yahin.
KABIR
Climax set.
They enter quietly.
64. INT. OBSERVATORY CONTROL – EVENING
Panels hum. A timer shows 06:59:50...
Naina sets micro-cams. Kabir checks exits, lock cycles.
65. EXT. OBSERVATORY ROOF – SUNSET
Sahir watches the rising blood moon. Breath fogs. A private ritual.
66. INT. OBSERVATORY MAIN HALL – 6:58 PM
DR. RUKHSAR (on earpiece)
Jab past ki baat ho, present me kheecho.
NAINA
Copy.
67. INT. OBSERVATORY – 7:00 PM
Main door CLANKS shut. Lights dim. The screen MONTAGES PHOTOS #1–#5—each fatal moment.
On the floor — chalked CIRCLE-CROSS sigil.
Sahir descends the metal stairs — shadow-first.
SAHIR
Aaj narrative ka control kiske paas?
KABIR
Jisne sach suna.
SAHIR
Sach simple hai — tum late ho. Maine tumhe mirror dikhaya.
NAINA (steady, anchoring)
Aur hum abhi yahan hain.
Sahir flinches at that line.
68. INT. OBSERVATORY BALCONY – SAME
Dhamre steps in — hands raised.
DHAMRE
Main confess karta hoon. Publicly.
Sahir’s soft grin — a shimmer of victory and pain.
69. INT. OBSERVATORY – MOMENTS LATER
Naina’s phone goes LIVE. Comments explode as DHAMRE speaks.
DHAMRE (on live)
2018 me Zeenat Khan ne pehle goli nahi chalayi. Maine report manipulate ki.
Sahir shuts his eyes — relief, rage, grief braided.
SAHIR
Aur saza?
KABIR
Law.
SAHIR (quiet)
Law ne usse mara.
70. INT. OBSERVATORY – TRIGGER
A faint BEEP under the floor. Naina’s lens catches a reflection — WIRES under grates.
NAINA (urgent)
Kabir — floor!
Kabir lunges at Sahir — they crash, grapple. Dhamre shouts for evacuation.
71. INT. OBSERVATORY – STRUGGLE
Hand-to-hand. Brutal. Sahir KNIFE-FLICKS — slices Kabir’s forearm.
NAINA (anchor, firm)
Kabir, tum abhi ho. Yahin ho. Mere saath.
Kabir breath centers. He counters. Disarms. Knife skitters.
72. INT. OBSERVATORY CONTROL – SAME
Naina traces wires. Timer 00:02:30. She pulls a main line — failsafe arms — 00:01:30.
NAINA
Shit.
73. INT. OBSERVATORY FLOOR – SAME
Sahir smiles through blood.
SAHIR
Delay kills.
Kabir headbutts him down. Spots the CIRCLE-CROSS on a bomb panel. Remembers the ropeway sketch.
He flips toggles in a REVERSE SEQUENCE — timer PAUSES at 00:00:28.
Kabir exhales.
74. INT. OBSERVATORY – SILENCE
Sahir slow claps.
SAHIR
Finally... on time.
He lunges. Both crash through a side railing — drop onto a lower level, cushioned by snow drift.
Pain. Breath clouds. Snow flurries.
75. EXT. OBSERVATORY OUTER – NIGHT
Snowstorm rises. Sirens approach.
Sahir coughs a laugh. He pulls a SMALL MEMORY CARD from his pocket. Flicks it into the snow.
SAHIR
Last photo.
Kabir reaches for it. Sahir shoves him — Kabir slips, recovers.
Sahir drags himself to the chalk sigil.
SAHIR (a whisper)
Finish it.
76. INT. OBSERVATORY CONTROL – SAME
Naina isolates final lines. The timer DIES. She runs out.
77. EXT. OBSERVATORY OUTER – CONTINUOUS
Naina sees Kabir pick the CARD.
Sahir’s eyes close. A faint, cold smile.
SAHIR
Ab late mat hona.
He slumps — alive, bleeding.
Ambulance hands take him.
78. INT. TEMP CABIN (NEAR OBSERVATORY) – LATER
Fireplace crackles. Kabir, Naina, Dhamre.
Naina slots the card. ONE PHOTO: The same snowfield. Tonight. A tight CLOSE-UP OF KABIR — his eyes meeting camera.
Silence.
DHAMRE (hushed)
Yeh kya hai?
KABIR (steady)
Closure.
NAINA (soft)
Ab tum late nahi the.
Kabir lets that in.
ACT 3 — AVALANCHE
79. EXT. OBSERVATORY – SAME NIGHT
Sahir on a stretcher. He catches Kabir’s eye as doors close.
SAHIR (faint)
Narrative... tumhara.
Doors shut.
80. INT. POLICE OUTPOST – DAWN
Dhamre signs his CONFESSION. Surrenders his BADGE.
DHAMRE (to Kabir)
Sorry... chhota lafz hai.
KABIR
Justice bada.
Dhamre nods. Officers take him.
81. EXT. CHURCH RUINS – MORNING
Sun on ash. The smoke-stench gone. Naina records a final piece.
NAINA (to camera)
Barf ke neeche sach jam jata hai. Pighalta hai to dard bhi bahar aata hai. Par
agar hum waqt pe pahunch jayein... kahani bachti hai.
Kabir watches from a distance — a small, human smile.
82. INT. DR. RUKHSAR’S CLINIC – DAY
Window light. Quiet plants.
RUKHSAR
Aaj kitni saans?
KABIR
Poora fayda.
They share a gentle, knowing smile.
83. EXT. HILL-STATION ROAD – GOLDEN HOUR
Pine silhouettes. Snow blinks in last light. Kabir and Naina walk the same road.
NAINA
Agli story?
KABIR (light)
Bas chai garam rahe.
They walk. Mountains breathe.
FADE OUT.
TAGS / MOTIFS / RECURRING LINES
· “Tum late ho.” → “Main abhi hoon.”
· Circle–Cross pattern = reverse-wiring solution.
· Z-13 = locker → bodycam truth.
· Memory Cards = authored narrative; last photo = Kabir’s closure.
RUNTIME & PACING TARGETS
· Act 1 (Melt): ~40 mins — discovery + 3 deaths + framing
· Act 2 (Fog): ~45 mins — investigation + mid-truth + square disruption
· Act 3 (Avalanche): ~35 mins — observatory showdown + confession + closure
Average scene length ~1–1.5 pages in standard courier formatting. Dialogues intentionally lean to preserve pace.
APPENDIX — QUICK DIALOGUE ALTERNATES (FOR REVISIONS)
ALT A (Anchor motif):
NAINA: Tum abhi ho.
KABIR: Abhi hoon.
ALT B (Sahir’s credo):
SAHIR: Justice waqt todta hai. Main sirf ghumata hoon.
ALT C (Dhamre’s guilt):
DHAMRE: Maine sach dekha. Report me jhooth likha.
ALT D (Kabir’s turn):
KABIR: Aaj main late nahi hoon.
END — “BARF KE NEECHÉ” (v1)
Ho gaya! 🎬
Maine “Barf Ke Neeche — Feature Screenplay (V1)” ka poora,
dialogue-by-dialogue feature script canvas par daal diya
hai—industry-ready format me, sluglines + tight action lines + motifs ke saath.
Aap screen pe right side/canvas me pura script dekh sakte ho.
Ending Note
“Barf
ke neeche chhupa sach hamesha ek din pighal kar bahar aata hai. Sawal sirf yeh
hai ki hum us waqt tak zinda rehte hain ya kahani ke saath khatam ho jaate hain.
Kabir ne seekha ki insaan ka asli imtihaan waqt ke saath daudna
nahi, balki us pal ko pakadna hai jismein sach aur insaaniyat ek saath zinda
hain.
‘Tum late ho’ se ‘Main abhi hoon’ tak ka safar hi is kahani ki
rooh hai.”
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